Monstrosity Legacy - Chapter Eleven (Four Parter!) (4/2/10)

[tresaqwe]

Haha! I loved it, Shrimp!

Spoiler:

"What? Why would I marry someone I don't even know when I don't even want to be married in the first place?"
"Well, Nicole is a very... Um, unique person and-"
"Cut to the chase."
"I'm afraid she'll kill me if I don't marry you to her."

You have no idea how much that made me laugh. xD

[zoompha]

Awesome chapter, once again! I always get excited when there's updates for this thing.

Spoiler:

Darn it, why does Brandi have to be so paranoid? Makes me angry, especially because she and Aiden are cute together. And the whole Lily mix-up? Way too much for my brain to handle! Maybe I'm just tired.

GreatgreatgreatgreatGREAT! *wants more*

[alien3335]

Ooooh! I released a new chapter before the end of the BC so it will actually make sense with some of the characters not being zombified! Wheeeeeeeee! *spins in chair*

Anyway, now that my swirly chair is done squeaking, here it is, Chapter Five!

Two big reveals that I've been sitting on for the LONGEST time. It's not even funny how long I've been planning to reveal Chris's daughter.
So there you go, the next chapter will (hopefully) have Bon Voyage, since my mother *MAY* be buying it for my birthday in 3 days. (3 days? WTF? Since when? XD)
Yes, yes... Rant over, go read.

[zoompha]

Wheeeeeeeee! Update! *also spins in chair*

I loved it, as always! And then I realized halfway through that your BC has been up for a while and I hadn't read it yet and freaked out. xD

But, yeah, it was coolio! I finally understand what the heck is going on with the dreams now. My prediction was totally wrong. xD Hehehe, I love sentry bots. They make my day a bit brighter.

Can't think.... of anything.... else to write..... brain shriveling up from heat........ (It's 90 degrees or something around here )

[alien3335]

I'm glad the BC made you so excited.

XD I HEART Jerry, he's amazing whenever Allyn and Brandi come over and steal the newspaper/kick over the trash can and save us from many cockroaches!

[alien3335]

New chapter! *cracks knuckles* At 2 am my time.
I'll admit it, this chapter has been rotting because my internet got pulled, but it's up now!

Chapter 5.5

[fireweazel]

I loved it shrimp!!! I've only read three chapters so far but I'm still reading right now. Well, i'll comment again later! I've got reading to do!

[zoompha]

Yussss, new chapter! It was awesome. It was 2 AM my time as well when I read it so I can't really remember it very well but that's okay. xD I just remember I liked it.

So, yay! xD

[alien3335]

All right! I have no idea how I did it, but even in the midst of a hectic season, I managed to get a chapter out! Woo! Go me!

Yay chapter!

And if there are any spelling mistakes, you'll have to forgive me, it's 11:15 pm over here and grammar checks are not something I plan on doing at this time of night. I'll try and fix them tomorrow.

[zoompha]

I'm always the first to read new chapters, aren't I? xD You always update when I'm on. So, I shall return with comments!

...Later.

[tresaqwe]

YAY! New chapter!
*runs off to read*

[zoompha]

Back!

Spoiler:

Uh oh, you let a bad word slip! :O

Not like I'm offended or anything. xD

Great chapter, though! Ooooh, Eric's got a cru-uuuush! And Jaiden makes me angry. Curse you, Marylena, for being... evil... or something! Grr, I say! xDD

I want to see how long this streak goes where I'm the first to read the new chapters.

[alien3335]

Emily:

Spoiler:

XD Yeah, I did. But imagine how frustrated he is, Aiden's like a pop-up or something.

Yes, Eric has a crush. Awwwww!

And good luck with the chapters, most of them will probably be released around midnight. XD

[smo52oms]

I'm back! I'm only about three updates behind.

Spoiler:

Wow, Shrimp. I don't even know where to start. You always have everything so well planned out, it seems. I can hardly fathom the amount of thought that goes into each chapter.

Who's Vera? Who was that guy? So many questions, I need answers. And Aiden and Jaiden (that rhymes! Sorry)? And of Course Marylena and Brandi both had to interfere. Everything was going so well! I mean, I wish the townies would just BACK OFF! Of course, that would leave nothing for you to make a story with!

You are fantastic at it, too! Your narration is so unique, yet it flows so well. I read 3 chapters tonight, and, in a way, I'm glad I did them all at once, instead of reading them on time, like a normal reader would.

Sorry this is so sporratic. It's been a long day... All I can say is keep up the good work, and don't withhold an update from us too long, Okay?

Loved it, in case you couldn't tell!
~Jane~

[alien3335]

Jane:

Spoiler:

Welcome back to the party, Jane.
I'll just start off by saying, most of this I didn't plan. I mean, Mina's back story, yes. However how Lily developed such a unique personality, Jaiden being an ex-party girl, most of them are just spur-of-the-moment decisions. They keep my story interesting and I love it.
I love the cliff hangers, in case you hadn't noticed. They keep people wondering and that's one thing I love to do as a writer.

And thanks for saying I'm a good writer. When I'm writing it I tend to think 'I may be using a bit too much dialogue for this part' but when I go back and reread it, I love the way it just seems to make the conversation flow. I mean, do you really pause to think about a person's movements if you're in an intense conversation? Not really.

And it's all right with the sporratic-ness. I completely understand.

I'm not sure when the next chapter will be out, though. I've been rather busy what with school starting again and it has my head spinning a bit.

[smo52oms]

I know what you mean about school! For us (In Canada), it starts next Tuesday. I am not looking forward to it!

Spoiler:

And you're right about the dialogue really making it flow! Another thing I don't think I mentioned is how I love your use of slides! Like when you were telling about Jaiden's evening, or when Mina was recapping her dream to Lee. It just makes it so, captivating! You really are very talented.

~Jane~

[alien3335]

All righty, there's an update for you.

Chapter 6.3

It shouldn't take long for me to get the next part out.
Keep in my that I said it shouldn't... I didn't say it wouldn't. XD

[zoompha]

I'm the first to read it again!!! =DDD

...I'll be back. xD

EDIT: Back! Is it just me, or did this chapter seem shorter than usual? Maybe I'm just hallucinating...

Spoiler:

Personally, I think Jaiden got what she deserved. Only teensy tiny little screw-up there; at the party she randomly switches outfits. xD But, it's not terribly noticeable, don't worry.

At one point when you meant to write "Aiden tried to be calm", but it came out as "Aiden tried to be clam"... it made me crack up. xD

Ahem. Enough pointing out little mistakes. It was another great chapter, and Mina and Brendan's wall-wraslin' made me laugh. Ahh, that tradition will never die.

Fantastic update, and I shall be awaiting the next!

[alien3335]

Emily:

Spoiler:

XD The chapter is actually much, MUCH longer than normal. Almost 125 slides. It's just because there was so much plottiness all crammed together.

Actually, she's supposed to switch outfits. It's sort of like the difference between Party-Girl Jade and Mother Jaiden.

Pfft, what are you talking about? He was TRYING to be a clam.
XD Thanks, I'll have to fix it. I forgot to go over and check.

If you want to, I got my first picspam up on my LJ and you can check that out.

[zoompha]

Spoiler:

Oooh, picspam? I am quite curious now. *prods LJ*

Wait a minute... it just occurred to me that I don't know your LJ account!

The world is coming to an enddddd!!! D:

xD

Okay, I'll quit clogging up your legacy thread now.